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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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Traffic jam is one of the serious global issues in the current period, they happen in many towns and cities. The factors of
this
 problem and the ways to solve it will be presented in the essay.
To begin
 with, the cause of having of the high volume of traffic is the large number of private cars on the road. There are two reasons why they are likely to have their own vehicles.
Firstly
, it saves time because they do not have to wait for public transportation
such
 as buses to come and pick them up.
Secondly
, it is convenient to travel anywhere because it is direct to the target place
whereas
 public shipment needs to make many transfers during the trips. In my point of view, Government should improve public transport because if it is good, many citizens will decide to use it, and the number of cars on the street will be decreased.
Moreover
, if compared between public transportation and cars contain the same amount of humans. the bus will win because if it uses less space to contain many
people
.
For example
,one bus can contain 30
people
whereas
 one car can contain about 4-5
people
. Unfortunately, public shipping in some countries is terrible which is why many
people
 do not want to use it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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