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Road transportation is taking over rail services.Discuss the positive and negatives effects of this development.is this situation true for your country?

Nowadays, the world population
continuing
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 to travel from
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place
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 to another
place
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 through
road
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 and
railway
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system
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systems
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. It is a fact that
road
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 transportation developing tremendously compared to
railway
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services
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. In
this
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positive
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 and negative outcomes of
this
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 subject and
also
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 refer
the
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 present situation
of
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 my
country
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.
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, there are many optimistic effects on
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 transportation rather than
railway
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services
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.
Firstly
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,
road
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 constructions take less
time
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 and low cost
while
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railway
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 track takes a long period of
time
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 to develop and it needs more raw materials like iron pillars and proper electrical supplies.
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, roads are difficult to
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 in remote and
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 areas.
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, in India majority of the upper hillside of
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the Himalaya
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Himalaya
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Himalayas
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 still
using
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road
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services
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 because it is more convenient for industries and
the
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apply
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tourist sites.
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,
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while
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compare to
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 service the excessive use of
road
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 transportation increase air pollution and CO2 emission because trains can't transfer huge population and heavy goods from
one
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place
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 to another
place
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 in a limited
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. To illustrate
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,
majority
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 of the metropolitan cities have
very
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 strong
railway
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 system because it is more useful for industrial growth and business development
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 we can say that
railway
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services
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 are inevitable for modern social life.
In addition
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, my
country
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 India
hav
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has
 e
one
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 of the largest
railway
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system
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systems
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 for commuting goods and
service
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services
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 because it is
one
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 of the biggest
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country
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 with
huge
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 population. Even though
,
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road
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 systems are widely used but government and citizens prefer trains in order to establish widespread
services
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 all over the
country
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. In conclusion, there is a saying
'a
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 coin has two sides
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 both roads and railways are more helpful for economic growth and the process of human migration.
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, these
services
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needs
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 to update every
time
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 for future development.

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