Some people think that success comes from hard work and determination . But some people believe that money and physical appearances are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It
is argued that hard Correct pronoun usage
Some
work
and dedication
are important in order
to become successful while
others believe that wealth and a persons
outlook are more important . Change noun form
person's
This
essay believes that without hard and dedication
no one
can become successful.
In this
contemporary era, no one
can become successful without patience and determination. In order
to complete a task , one
needs to have an aim and work
hard. Without hard work
and dedication
one
cannot achieve his desire
score . It Replace the word
desired
is not guarantee
that Change the verb form
is not guaranteed
one
will be able to complete the task in
his first attempt . Change preposition
on
That is
why,
hard Remove the comma
apply
work
is important . For instance
, an average student will do good results if he stays punctual and work
hard . Meanwhile , a talented student will do Change the verb form
works
bad
result if he does not stay sincere Correct article usage
a bad
to
his studies . Change preposition
in
That is
why,
hard Remove the comma
apply
work
and dedication
are very important in our life .
Some people believe that money and physical appearance are important in order
to become successful . However
, money helps a person to be in
Change preposition
on
the
track Correct article usage
apply
of
becoming successful. Physical appearances are not important in Change preposition
to
order
to become successful . For example
, a person from a rich family will not be successful even if he has enough wealth .
In conclusion, without hard and dedication
no one
can become successful. These two are the main pillars in
Change preposition
apply
order
to become successful. Money and physical appearances
Fix the agreement mistake
appearance
does
not play any role to become successful. Change the verb form
do
That is
why,
they are not important.Remove the comma
apply
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