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Band 6

Today family members eat fewer meals together. Is this a positive or negative trend?

Nowadays family
members
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 have
a
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apply
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fewer
meal
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meals
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 together. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 it has positive and negative sides. On the one hand, having
meal
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a meal
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together with
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 family
members
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 has some negative sides. Nowadays
individuals
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 adopted
to
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gadgets
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that
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which
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 is why they are trying to eat
meal
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meals
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 by watching
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a movie
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movie
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movies
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 or something like that.
People
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 can relax more by food by watching movies because it is better than only eating food.
Clear
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The clear
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 vision is that
,
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apply
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 busy
people
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 try to save
their
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time
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 and it is
excellent
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an excellent
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 way for them.
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However
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 from social media
platforms
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,platforms
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people
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 can know that everybody
become
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becomes
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 busy because
individuals
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 become smarter and
for
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this
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 reason
earn
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earns
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 money is
little
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a little
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 bit difficult.
On the other hand
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, having
meal
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a meal
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 with relatives has a lot of positive sides. As
individuals
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 become busy and they are have not
time
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 for chilling out with their family
members
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 by going to
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the mountain
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mountain
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mountains
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 or something like that.
However
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from
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to
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 the magazine called "
Times
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"
people
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 can know that
crimes
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crime
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 rates increasing day by day,
consequence
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a consequence
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of
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apply
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is
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his
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lack
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a lack
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 of
parents
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parental
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 control
to
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over
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 their
childrens
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children
.
That is
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 why having to meal with family
members
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 is good for everyone
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however
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,however
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, it makes them happy.
Clear
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The clear
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 vision is that if
individuals
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 spend their
time
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 with family
members
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 they
are
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apply
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can
to
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speak with them,
talk
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and talk
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 about some
problem
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problems
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 or events. Taking everything into consideration,
people
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 should spend their
time
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 at least
in
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at
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the
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apply
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dinner. It can be helpful for everyone because by
this
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 parents can control their
childrens
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children
children's
however
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 talk about how they
are spend
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are spending
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 their
time
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication
  • bonding
  • interaction
  • quality time
  • technology-free
  • busy schedules
  • work commitments
  • nurturing relationships
  • sharing experiences
  • community spirit
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