Today family members eat fewer meals together. Is this a positive or negative trend?
Nowadays family
members
have a
fewer Correct article usage
apply
meal
together. In my Fix the agreement mistake
meals
opinion
it has positive and negative sides.
On the one hand, having Add a comma
,opinion
meal
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a meal
together with
family members
has some negative sides. Nowadays individuals
adopted to
gadgets Change preposition
apply
that
is why they are trying to eat Correct pronoun usage
which
meal
by watching Fix the agreement mistake
meals
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a movie
movie
or something like that. Fix the agreement mistake
movies
People
can relax more by food by watching movies because it is better than only eating food. Clear
vision is thatCorrect article usage
The clear
,
busy Remove the comma
apply
people
try to save their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
time
and it is excellent
way for them. Add an article
an excellent
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from social media Add a comma
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platforms
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people
can know that everybody become
busy because Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
individuals
become smarter and for
this
reason earn
money is Change the verb form
earns
little
bit difficult.
Add an article
a little
On the other hand
, having meal
with relatives has a lot of positive sides. As Add an article
a meal
individuals
become busy and they are have not time
for chilling out with their family members
by going to Add an article
the mountain
mountain
or something like that. Fix the agreement mistake
mountains
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from
the magazine called "Change preposition
to
Times
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people
can know that crimes
rates increasing day by day, Change the noun form
crime
consequence
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a consequence
the consequence
of
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apply
is
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his
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
parents
control Replace the word
parental
to
their Change preposition
over
childrens
. Correct your spelling
children
That is
why having to meal with family members
is good for everyone however
, it makes them happy. Add the comma(s)
,however
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vision is that if Correct article usage
The clear
individuals
spend their time
with family members
they are
can Unnecessary verb
apply
to
speak with them, Fix the infinitive
apply
talk
about some Correct word choice
and talk
problem
or events.
Taking everything into consideration, Fix the agreement mistake
problems
people
should spend their time
at least in
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at
the
dinner. It can be helpful for everyone because by Correct article usage
apply
this
parents can control their childrens
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children
children's
however
talk about how they are spend
their Change the verb form
are spending
time
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite