The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

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generation

by using different

sources

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percentagewise

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percentages

in 2015 and future

forecast

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forecasts

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for 2040

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and

also

compare total capacity in gigawatts.

Overall

, fossil fuels accounted for the biggest proportion of energy

generation

in 2015 and

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it will have stayed the biggest segment of

power

generation

by 2040.

Additionally

, percentages for other renewables and nuclear sources approximately will be the same in 2040, as these were in 2015.

However

, there will be a considerable increase in using of solar and wind energy in 2040.

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, total generating will double in 2040 from 6,688 GW to 11,678 GW. In 2015, fossil fuels were the primary source of

power

generation

;

however

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number will have decreased by 20% to only 44% by 2040.

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, the figures for wind and nuclear sources

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growth to 21% and 5% respectively. As for solar

power

, there will be a remarkable increase from a modest 2% to over a quarter (18%) which will make it the

third highest

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category.

Besides

, the figures for wind

power

will witness a significant rise

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7% to 12%.

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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities Closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, many animal species are becoming extinct. Some people believe that countries and individuals must solve this problem. Others believe that human beings are more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.