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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #lives #changes #change
A group of individuals love to adhere to a type of lifestyle rather than change patterns
while
 another group are of the opinion that adopting different lifestyle patterns
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benefits attached to
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. These schools of thought have their own advantages and disadvantages. I think
people
 should take on new pathways in
life
 as sticking to one pattern of
life
 may be of less benefit to them.
Firstly
, engaging in different aspects of
life
 as humans promotes
self discovery
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. Humans are known to have different features which make them behave the way they do.
For example
,
people
 who engage in occupations where they work in solitude may get to understand the importance of interpersonal relationships by switching to new jobs.
In addition
, taking on new pathways in
life
 can serve to relieve stress. It is known that doing a particular thing over a very long period of time can be boring and may become a source of stress
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 a lot of
people
.
This
 may be avoided by starting new adventures.
This
 can be seen among employees who experienced stress because of the monotony of their jobs but got relief from participating in unfamiliar activities. Allowing changes in
one''s
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one's
life
also
 supports better development of the human brain as more areas are engaged in our functions.
On the other hand
, the most outstanding drawback of allowing changes is that it may affect the level of mastery
people
 may have in a particular area of
life
. Gaining mastery in any aspect of
life
 requires time
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • mastery
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • hesitancy
  • risk-taking
  • transitions
  • enrichment
  • equilibrium
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