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Some people believe that unpaid community activity service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children.) To what extent do you agree or degree?

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Few people opine that free community task assistance should be a mandatory part of the higher education curriculum.
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 agree with the fact that students have to do unpaid
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 for the community,but I do not agree that it should be compulsory. In the modern ,age the culture of working for the welfare of
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 is important for a student in a plethora of scenes.
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 for the nation not only aids the
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 but
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 helps him/her to connect with the nation more and more.
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, doing
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 at an early age provides a good platform in order to learn varieties of skills and achieve their goals in a better way.
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, a child who did
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 during their college will have great skills in time management.
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 working for
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 will benefit both children
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society
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, there are different types of students we have in our
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 and not have identical abilities .since, many students are not capable of doing
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 and studying at the same time.
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,we do not force them to do
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.
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, working for free loses the interest of a significant amount of the population. which causes dislike of
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 and might affect their upcoming future .
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 many individuals do not want to
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 again because of poor job satisfaction so working for
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 is a subjective choice and people have to
work
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according to
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 their abilities. In conclusion ,how big the benefits of unpaid
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 for
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, should be a personal perspective.
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