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In a growing population most of the people believe that we should focus on producing more GMfoods. advantages and disadvantages ?

#population #people #focus #gmfoods
It is thought by many
people
 that planting huge
amount
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 of
GMfoods
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GM foods
 is the best solution for
growing
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a growing
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 population. Harvesting
GMfoods
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GM foods
 have both advantages and disadvantages. I will
discussing
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 both in the
fallowing
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 essay.
Firstly
,GM foods can be
adoptable
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in
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to
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 different weathers.they can be planted in desert areas, and
poor
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 soil , despite
of
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harsh weather conditions. In
additionally
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, they can grow faster than usual plants.
As a result
,
people
 can eat
different
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kind
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kinds
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 of vegetables and fruits
with in
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within
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 a year. For
examples
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, farmers are growing apple
GMfoods
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GM foods
 that can be harvested
in
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from
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 rich sources
to
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for
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 the
people
.They are delicious in taste and good
at
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 appearance. And they have rich vitamins and minerals ,
protiens
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proteins
 same as others. On the
othar
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other
 hand,
reaearchers
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researchers
 modified their gene structure
for
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 they could not get rid. They can store
many
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 days but
these saved food
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 can cause different health
problems
such
 as
,
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 digestion
problems
,blindness,
heart
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and heart
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problems
.
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,
people
 bought
this
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 preserved
GMfoods
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GM foods
 and saved
again
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 in refrigerators
this
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 causes serious health
problems
. In conclusion,
GMfoods
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GM foods
 can
providing
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 rich vitamins and
mineral contained
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 foods to the world and they are good sources and available around everywhere.The advantages
are outweigh
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 the disadvantages.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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