Some people think that children's free time must include educational activities otherwise they will waste their time. What is your opinion?

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Certain people claim that
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must spend leisure
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only learning because other ways lead to
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their
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. I absolutely disagree with
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statement, unless it significantly develops their education. In general, all
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and youngsters must not be educated for the whole
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, since devoting childhood barely to studying causes delayed personal development. Childhood is a major period, which contains important processes apart from studying. One clear example is a hobby, and little ones need to spend their free
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with it, because it gives them an opportunity to feel pleasure ,unlike educational
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.
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, if
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's all free
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includes educational
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they won’t have
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for relationships and friends, whereby they will be socially inactive.
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, even education should not take
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full
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. It is obvious that most
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find it difficult to educate, and it makes them tired.
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, they must have an amount of
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that does not contain any educational
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, because spending
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only for studying has negative results.
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, sitting at a desk and studying day long can be the reason for physical weakness, so
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must have free
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to play, run and jump and etc. As I said education process gives fatigue, exactly not only physical but
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emotional.
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, a child who felt emotionally tired won’t wish to do anything ,
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there can occur depression and
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. In conclusion, overeducating of
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could be a reason for serious issues
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as stress or tiredness. I believe that
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also
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must have free
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, and educational
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need to be limited.
Submitted by Deadline 8th April IELTS on

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