Some people think that children's free time must include educational activities otherwise they will waste their time. What is your opinion?

Certain people claim that
children
must spend leisure
time
only learning because other ways lead to
waste
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their
time
. I absolutely disagree with
this
statement, unless it significantly develops their education. In general, all
children
and youngsters must not be educated for the whole
time
, since devoting childhood barely to studying causes delayed personal development. Childhood is a major period, which contains important processes apart from studying. One clear example is a hobby, and little ones need to spend their free
time
with it, because it gives them an opportunity to feel pleasure ,unlike educational
activities
.
In addition
, if
children
's all free
time
includes educational
activities
they won’t have
time
for relationships and friends, whereby they will be socially inactive.
Therefore
, even education should not take
children
full
time
. It is obvious that most
children
find it difficult to educate, and it makes them tired.
Consequently
, they must have an amount of
time
that does not contain any educational
activities
, because spending
time
only for studying has negative results.
For instance
, sitting at a desk and studying day long can be the reason for physical weakness, so
children
must have free
time
to play, run and jump and etc. As I said education process gives fatigue, exactly not only physical but
also
emotional.
Subsequently
, a child who felt emotionally tired won’t wish to do anything ,
moreover
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there can occur depression and
stressed
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. In conclusion, overeducating of
children
could be a reason for serious issues
such
as stress or tiredness. I believe that
children
also
must have free
time
, and educational
activities
need to be limited.
Submitted by Deadline 8th April IELTS on

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