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Animals are used around the world for a variety of purposes, such as medical testing and food. While many people believe this is justified, others feel that animals should not be exploited by humans. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There is a lot of debate about whether using animal
products
 is ethical or not. Some people think it's okay to
use
animals
 for food and testing, but others disagree. In my opinion, we should
use
 animal
products
, but we need to be careful about how we do it. One reason to
use
 animal
products
 is that they can provide important nutrients that we need to be healthy.
For example
, meat has protein that our bodies need to work properly.
Also
, sometimes we need to test new medicines on
animals
 to make sure they are safe for people to
use
.
However
, some people say that it's not necessary to
use
 animal
products
. They believe that we can get all the nutrients we need from plants
,
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 and that testing on
animals
 is cruel and unnecessary. I think that we should
use
 animal
products
, but only when we really need to. We should try to
use
 alternative sources of nutrients when possible, and we should make sure that
animals
 are treated
as well as
 possible when we do
use
 them.
For example
, we should make sure that
animals
 used for testing are not hurt more than they have to
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. In conclusion, we need to think carefully about using animal
products
.
While
 they can be helpful, we should try to
use
 them as little as possible and make sure we are not being cruel to
animals
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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