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Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?

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Some people believe that
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children
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children
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’s should attend
school
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 from an early
age
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. Others argue and consider unnecessary pressure on their
development
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. It’s been observed that
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young
children
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 who are going through their
development
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 phase are not sensible enough to understand the activities in their surroundings. Sending them to
school
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 will not be
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 as it would put unnecessary pressure on them. To illustrate
this
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further
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children
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’s who are older in
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found
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 in activities as compared to the young ones.
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, if young
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 at
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not
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 able to cope with their studies and understand the basic concept
than
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 it may lead to a catastrophic situation for their future life because they will not be able to grasp the advanced concepts. The process of neurological
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 at a young
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 is considered a critical process where
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children
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’s learning ability is far more as compared to the adult
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.
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, those students who are exposed to multiple languages at
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 young
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 become very proficient in a very short span as compared to learning the language
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 their teenage. Most importantly, In case of any disability in
children
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 in terms of psychological and physical can be addressed at a very young
age
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 because in
school
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children
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 will go through a series of evaluations.
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, those
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 who are short-tempered or face difficulty in speaking get therapies from
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 psychiatrist and
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 their disabilities may not come as an obstacle
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 their upcoming life. In Conclusion, now
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 days role of schools is becoming very crucial in terms of
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children
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’s nourishment and evaluation because young
children
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requires
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 evaluators with contemporary skills for their
development
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socialization
  • peer interaction
  • academic foundation
  • literacy
  • numeracy
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • acceptance
  • educational resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • learning experience
  • early identification
  • learning disabilities
  • intervention
  • support
  • assistance
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