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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment ? What can be done by individuals and government to solve this problem ?

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In
this
 present
world
, the environment is very awful. One more thing that makes the surrounding problem around the
world
 is
plastics
 ,
for example
,
plastic
 bags,
plastic
 bottles and
plastic
 packaging. In
the
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 essay, I will discuss how
plastic
 destroys the environment and how to solve
this
 problem by people and government. First of all,
plastics
 are hard to decompose. And the
plastics
 are increasing
in
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every year
such
 as in Asian countries the percentage of
use
plastics
are
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 very higher than
last
 year. Oceans have many
plastics
are
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 very dangerous for animals.
On the other hand
,
plastic
 is easy to
use
 and makes life easier. Many shops
use
plastics
 because it is very easy to
use
 and cheap.
In addition
, government and humans can help with
this
 problem
therefore
, the government can get taxes from
plastics
 manufacturers and give policies to reduce
plastics
.
Moreover
, people can help the
world
 likes using products
that
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from
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 nature
such
 as cotton bags, recycle bottles and
use
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nature packaging.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that
plastics
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 products affected the environment,
for
instance
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the
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global warming around the
world
,
and
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the trouble in the river and the bad weather around the
world
 and
also
 climate change.
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