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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is said that nobody will buy printed books or newspapers in the future because all of us will have access to online reading with any information we need without paying. In my
opinion
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 I agree with
this
 statement because we live in
information
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 age
when
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where
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people
accustomed
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 to using the internet.
Firstly
, there is a huge advantage for our environment. Trees are not cut down for the sake of making paper and paper materials. In
this
case
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 we bring the benefit for us by ourselves because trees are helping us to breathe so we can maintain health.
This
 brings me to my second point. Nowadays the overwhelming majority of
people
 use the internet to access the
news
 or online books.
This
 is a common trend which has many advantages
such
 as publishing or accessing
information
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 on the internet for free. What is more,
people
 can find everything they want online.
Thirdly
,
people
 can read the
news
 in any
language
 from any country in the world. We got used to
read
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 newspapers
on
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in
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 our national
language
. But have you ever imagined that some
people
 who want to improve other languages don’t have an opportunity to read printed
news
 in
this
language
?
Furthermore
, many tourists or foreigners prefer to read the
news
on
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 their own
language
while
 staying in another country. Online reading provides
an
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 ability to read the
news
on
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 any
language
 that humans want and
besides
 much faster and without payment. All in all, I believe that we will maintain online reading in the future as it simplifies our lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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