some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time .This can benefit teenageers and the community as well .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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one of the crucial
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in one's
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age itself, a person can able to explore and understand the wide horizons of
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societal
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perspective. Teenagers during
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time are naive and delicate in terms of
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maturity
, social roles and
responsiblities
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responsibilities
. Depending on their cultivation, they can
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beneficial or an obstacle in
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society.
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, I firmly opined that they should be taught and
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about positive works and one of them is doing unpaid community work. Nowadays, various schools,
colleges
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and colleges
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have
collborated
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collaborated
with different NGOs to make their students
to
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work voluntarily in various activities.
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, my school has started arranging a trip to
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age house once
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a month, where they take students there and teach them to serve the poor old age people in their daily
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activities.
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impacts the student's mindset positively which benefits them in their
perosnal
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personal
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as well
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that they understand the situation of old people and
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make a lovely bonding with their elder family , i.e., grandfather and grandmother. Parents can
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contribute
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imbibing
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good thoughts in teenagers. They can send their children to an orphanage or any religious
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in
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the
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nearby. In
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centers
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, they get to know the poor unlucky children and their
life
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situation, donate
them
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gifts,
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them some academic subjects.
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will be advantageous to everyone
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as,
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, the temple, church would get some volunteers who can help them in their preaching activities. The orphans would
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get cheered up to
recieve
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receive
the gifts and learn new skills and knowledge.
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, I reiterate that teenage and teenagers can be moulded in any shape and
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nourishing them with some community work will certainly make them realize
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their moral duties as a citizen, which would
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lead to a better country.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandatory
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • teenagers
  • free time
  • benefit
  • responsibility
  • empathy
  • skills
  • learning opportunities
  • freedom
  • resentment
  • motivation
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