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the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.

the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.
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The given picture illustrates two different versions of maps of an
island
, the first one
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its
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is
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 natural map, and the second one emerges its modification for tourist facilities.
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, there are two maps with scales of 100 meters with details
wich
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which
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 allow us to
familiar
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with
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ourselves with
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 its new fantastic design.
Firstly
, a precise observer can specify that there are some palm trees
in
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 the
island
 that
maintained
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are maintained
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as
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apply
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a
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natural beauty of
land
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the land
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 and in the
west
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,west
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 we can locate
a shallow water suits
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a shallow water suit
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 for lovers of swimming.
on the other hand
,
architectures
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 and engineers
hade
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had
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 made facilities for visitors as much as their
creativity's
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 and native of
island
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the island
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 let them
to
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build. There is a restaurant near the beach with a view
to
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of
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sea
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the sea
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 and
cozy
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cosy
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 tents for
accomodation
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accommodation
 in the middle of
island
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the island
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.
Construction
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The construction
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 team have made a tiny pier to draw
attention
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the attention
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 of sailing and fishing fans. In conclusion, substantial changes are obvious, which had made the
island
 a nice target for site seeing.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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