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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The preference for living in a
city
 or a
village
 has been a concept of debate for most people for a very long time, some may choose a
city
 over a
village
 or vice versa. In my ,opinion I would choose to live in a
city
due to
 it having a better chance of building a successful career and having better exposure to the world.
However
, living in a
village
 or a rural area is
also
 a good option for people, as it is comparatively more isolated from the stressful
life
 of the
city
.
For example
, many cities have better chances of advancement and opportunities in
life
. but it
also
 comes with problems like stressful
life
, extreme work culture and having less time for extracurricular activities like exercising etc.
Therefore
, a
village
 or rural area provides us with healthier and less exhausting
life
. It
also
 provides us with decent opportunities for careers. but villages
also
 have their own problems like underdeveloped infrastructure, and underwhelming amenities when compared to a
city
. Living in a
city
 is not a bad option after all,
due to
 examples like better job opportunities, better infrastructure, amenities and a convenient
life
. Apart from these common ,
benefits
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 there are other reasons why I would choose to live in a
city
 and those are,
firstly
, the exposure to the world and to have experience in handling situations.
Secondly
, cities have better health care facilities and
lastly
, a
city
 can help improve our financial condition. In conclusion, both cities and rural areas are good options to live in. But they both come with their advantages and disadvantages. In my ,opinion I would prefer the
city
 over a rural area but others may have a different preference.
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