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Some feel that cities shold be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important.

#feel #cities #shold #functionality
It is thought that street artist should be provided with an allowance for
graffiti
,
while
 others consider it as a restricted type of
art
, I believe that
this
graffiti
 play a key role in the general
city
 appearance. On the one hand, a vasts amounts of people do not like street
art
.
That is
 because they think painting
graffiti
 will dilute the atmosphere of the
city
. Or they maybe see
graffiti
 bad as a whole.
For instance
, in Germany, Berlin a lot of
graffiti
 was printed in the southern part of the
city
 and
this
 increased intentions of society and those painters. Not all residents determine
graffiti
 as
art
, so they do not like it, I,
however
, think that
graffiti
are
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 crucial for the style of the
city
.
On the other hand
, having painted street
art
 makes the
city
 looks better.
That is
 to say that a majority of
graffiti
 is treated as the heritage of the whole place or high-quality grace.
Moreover
, they can have margins for the buildings, which are disused and have dire facades. Take
for example
 Sydney, there is a lot of
graffiti
 there which maintains the whole style of the
city
, and even the government has restricted washing
graffiti
.
Therefore
, I think why
graffiti
are
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 important
in
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to
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 the
city
's appearance.
To sum up
, even if not all residents do not love
graffiti
, I think that
this
 type of
art
 makes the
city
 more attractive, so I think it can not be banned.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Cultural heritage
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban planning
  • Sustainable development
  • Psychological well-being
  • Economic growth
  • Tourism industry
  • Architectural marvels
  • Public spaces
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental impact
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial hubs
  • Green spaces
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