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Schools should offer sport activities.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that schools should offer some
types
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 of physical
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programs
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 to their
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. Personally, I strongly agree with
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 plan, because I believe that more physical
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programs
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 lead to more energetic and healthier
students
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 become. More physical
education
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programs
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 at school
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 necessary for
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 to have
healthy
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 body.
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 of
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 not only help them to be fit, in shape and healthy, but could make them
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relieve their stress
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 during exams periods.
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, physical
educations
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programs
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 could establish and expand connections between
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 and reduce probable isolation among them which
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great
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 impact on their future relationships. As mentioned above, physical
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programs
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 lead to
healthy
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 body which could minimize the chance of obesity and other
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 issues in the future, so they become aware of their
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. Physical
health
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programs
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 could balance both their mental and physical activity. Especially in Iran,
students
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 only participate in one physical program during a week which does not seem enough.
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 becomes more considerable when we find
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 less active nowadays because of various video games and
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 social
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 on smartphones. So, these physical
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 at school could trigger their motivation to be active and work out more.
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, these
programs
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 must execute regularly not sporadically in order to have an expected impact on
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. The main conclusion to be drawn from
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,
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keeping
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students
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 more and more active and making them
to
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be more aware of their
health
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, especially with those physical
programs
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 today, we’ll have a healthy generation tomorrow.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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