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Question: You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter: -Describe the problem with the equipment - Explain what happened when you phoned the shop - Say what you would like the manager do

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Dear Sir or Madam: I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
about
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 a microwave oven I purchased from your shop on November 10th. The model that I bought is M3C and the invoice number is 018K4L, which is for your reference. When I used the microwave oven the day I bought it, I found it with a faulty timer. No matter how much time I set to heat up the food, it would not start the time countdown. I tried to find solutions in the user guide but did not find any suggestions related to
this
 type of malfunction. Two days later, I called your shop’s service hotline to request help. One of your employees, named Jim, answered and promised
me
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to send a technician over to my home within 24 hours.
However
, it has been three days since I called and no one showed up or contacted me for
follow-up
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. I feel extremely disappointed about
this
 experience.
Therefore
, I request a full refund of the microwave oven I purchased, or you can replace a well-functioned piece with the current one. I would be glad for a reply without
further
 delay, or I may have to take legal
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. Yours faithfully John Doe
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