Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People
have different opinions regarding education
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. Even though some of them consider that students should
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their path
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the needs of society, I disagree with that opinion. From my point of view, everyone should have an opportunity to choose their profession. The job that we decide to do when we chose university will be
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part of our life for a very long time
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since
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usually get retired after 30 or 40 years of work.
People
have different interests and some of them are better in certain fields and disciplines than
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others, so
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, I am much better
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natural sciences than languages,
while
my best friend had huge difficulties with
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math and chemistry, but she still managed to learn how to fluently speak 4 languages. Both of us chose our jobs
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our abilities and prons and we are doing them very well,
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I am not sure if we would be able to do the same if we chose the professions that we did not like
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or some
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disciplines
discipline
that we were very bad at.
On the other hand
, we are all part of society, so we need to contribute to the societies needs with our work,
therefore
some
people
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the profession that will be
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for everyone in the future, no matter
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their preferences. Except that,
people
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careers in
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technology and science and
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other similar fields that will probably become very popular, have
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chance to earn
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salary
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and gain financial stability faster than the
people
that chose unpopular professions. In conclusion, even though some professions will be of
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greater use in the future and can bring more benefit to
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both, individuals and society, one should
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according
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her own wishes and abilities, so she will be able to achieve her highest potential doing that job.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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