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Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Plastic packaging has caused serious environmental problems these days. Many
people
 are debating on whether corporations or individuals should bear more responsibility. In my opinion,
although
 companies are obligated to produce less packaging, It is more of an individual effort to reduce pollution. Supermarkets and manufacturers have been offering packaging to customers since the invention of plastic. It was often considered convenient in the past
due to
 its lightweight.
However
, as there has been a surge in the
use
 of packaging over the past few years,
people
 are gradually realizing that it could be detrimental to the environment.
Therefore
, advocates are calling on corporations to reduce the amount of packaging on their commodities, preventing
further
 environmental damage. I agree that big companies could take steps to cut down their packaging
use
,
nevertheless
, the root cause for its prevalence is mainly
due to
 the market demand. Individual action plays a crucial role in deciding what products flow into the public. Because
people
 have always found the packaging to be not only convenient but
also
 attractive, they are actively choosing items that have well-designed packaging.
As a result
, these commodities tend to become more popular in the market as they are highly demanded.
For example
, the wide
use
 of bottled
water
 demonstrates how everything can be commodified by using proper packaging. If a person wants to drink
water
, they can always choose to boil
water
 via kettle
instead
 of creating more empty
water
 bottles.
Thus
, It is up to the individual effort to reject these products
To conclude
, despite corporations and manufacturers being the producers of various sorts of packaging,
people
's consumption is the driving factor behind their popularity.
Hence
, It is important for the government to raise public awareness against the
use
 of packaging.
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