Some people say that main environmental problem of our time is thye loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are other important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and your opinion.

According to
various surveys conducted in past, we come to
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conclusion that our environment is at stake in current times
due to
many
factors
, one among which
are
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the loss of particular species of plants and animals.
Nevertheless
, there are various other important
factors
contributing to it as pointed
by
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some other people. I will discuss both the views in the below
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paragraphs
paragraph
and highlight my say on
this
topic. Common people of our society
tensds
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tend
to notice only what they see around them and
beleive
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believe
that the utmost cause for environmental problems of our time is mainly
due to
plants and
animals
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animal
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species which are getting endangered or extinct. They are certainly right from their point
view
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of view
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but
also
less knowledgeable about various others
factors
like pollution,
green house
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greenhouse
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gasses, industrial wastes, CFCs etc.
However
, I
beleive
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believe
that the other most important
factors
needs
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to be brought into action for a better environment.
For example
, pollution of air and water and its effects are typically least known by
a
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common man. Various environmentalists have considered these
factors
as
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of major concern in recent times and
subsequently
introduced many action plans to reduce them. Different campaigns have
also
been run by them in order to bring
this
issue
into
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the comon
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comon
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common
man's notice.
Therefore
I
along with
many other people
beleive
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believe
that
though
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through
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extinction
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the extinction
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of plants and animals are concerning
factors
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, pollution( CFCs) which is
also
damaging the ozone layer
leading
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and leading
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to
increased
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the increased
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temperatureof
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temperature of
temperature
earth
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the earth
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, requires immediate and strict action altogether.
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