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In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reason for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays,
people
 are focusing on their health and body,
therefore
people
 always trying to maintain their daily health habits, there are a lot of ways to do that,
people
 can play some
sports
 or do
exercise
 or some
people
 hire a personal
fitness
trainer
, In
this
 ,essay we can discuss, what are the positive or negative impact of hiring a personal
trainer
.
To begin
 with, let us look at the reason for that,
however
, in my opinion,
while
 I believe, there are different types of human beings, there are, famous celebrities, some
people
 suffering some health issues or who haven't enough time to do some
sports
, etc. These kinds of
people
 are always looking for a personal
fitness
trainer
.
Secondly
, the certified personal
fitness
trainer
 is always updated with new methods of
exercise
 or diet plans, etc. That's why above mentioned
people
 are looking to get support and advice from a
fitness
trainer
. I think
this
 is a positive thing we can discuss.
Furthermore
, there are negative effects possible, if
people
 tend to do some
sports
 or
exercise
 without any personal
fitness
trainer
, it will affect some minor issues, there are, lack of knowledge about
exercise
 methods or doing some
exercise
 wrong stance without any supervision it will be harmful to their body as well. In the nutshell, some
people
 without engaging external society, only do their workout with a personal
trainer
, which is
also
 not good for them because, if
people
 do some
sports
 with others, it has positive gain for their minds and they can develop their own society as well.
Therefore
 ,on the one hand, it has benefited and
on the other hand
, it has a negative impact too.
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