The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
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The bar graphs depict the number of people who owned a personal computer in 2002 and 2010 by education level.
Overall
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, the proportion of the population who had a computer climbed steadily over the four years, to the point that nearly all graduate students had one in 2010, compared to non-diploma holders high
school
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students at the start of the period. Those who did not complete their secondary courses and had a laptop were slightly over 10% in 2002,
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those who ceased studying during their tertiary level with a personal computer were roughly 55%. Those who possessed
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gadget,
on the other hand
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, had a high
school
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diploma, a bachelor's degree, and
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education at roughly 35%, 65%, and 75%, respectively. Continuing the same pattern, in 2010, the majority of people who went to graduate
school
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and finished college possessed a laptop at a rate of between 80% and 100%.
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2010 data, high
school
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undergraduates are the least likely to have brought their own computers.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • population demographics
  • educational attainment
  • disparities
  • technological advancement
  • digital divide
  • market penetration
  • socio-economic factors
  • predictive insights
  • statistical significance
  • longitudinal study
  • accessibility
  • affordability
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