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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Many
countries
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 around the world are starting to invest more in transportation.
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, a number of people believe that the
transport
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 ministries should spend more money on developing the speed
train
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 lines.
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, others think that it is wiser to enhance the available public
transport
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. I believe that speed
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train
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 will help
countries
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avoiding
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 road traffic, and save the environment. Most
countries
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 prefer to spend a large amount of money on improving the
train
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 railways, and that to help the environment.
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, in Japan people start to use
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fast trains more than
other
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another
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 way of
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 , as they reach their destination faster, which reduce the usage of motorcycle, cars, and boats which exhaust CO2 and increases
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pollution.
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, the number of cars on the road will be reduced. In an instant , around 70 per cent of cars were deployed in China after introducing the speedy trains.
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, some
countries
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 still spend more on the old
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 methods, as it will help the society to not lose their jobs.
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 as, Oman still pays a lot in repairing the roads and taxi stations in
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 to ensure that a large number will use them to move around the country.
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, the tourists will still be able to use the public
transports
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transport
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were
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where
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it
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 will be cheaper in some cases. In conclusion, the third world
countries
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 try to pay less amount of
the
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money
in
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train
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 lines, but most of the
countries
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 focus more
in
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counstracting
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constructing
counteracting
contracting
 new railways for fast trains, in order to reduce
the
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pollution and traffic jams.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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