Young people are often influenced by their peers. This is called peer pressure. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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youngsters
can easily be convinced by their know people on the same group.
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good effect at the same time, there has a number of bad effects.
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will explain
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both views and my view.
Firstly
, advantages include,
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next generation will get to gain knowledge much faster with the help of their friends.
For instance
, with group
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they can learn more things.
in addition
to
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, with the advent of
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,
youngsters
are exposed to
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range of things and if they a good friends.
for example
, my kids 6 and 3
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more things, than
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knew, at their like stage. Like vocabulary, language and insight into technology. So it is important that
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we let youth
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spend more time with their friends of the same maturity.
Secondly
, extremely corporation with peers, disadvantages include,
Youngsters
needs get increase. To cite an example, influenced by others. Some kids may ask for
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i phone
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iPhone
which is very expensive. Sometimes their parents are not capable
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buying
this
. So unfulfillment of the
youngsters
may lead to bad activities
such
as
robery
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robbery
or theft. Nowadays, it is a common concern among parents. So, always ensure that
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youngsters
not be influenced by
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peers.
To conclude
, it has
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amount of advantages and
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has
high
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amount of disadvantages. In
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modern
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we cannot hold
youngsters
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. There is only one solution, let them spend their time with their peers but always monitor their behaviours and
also
balance their activities
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