The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
The graphs illustrate the number of
Japanese
citiziens
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citizens
that travelled outside Japan for
touristic
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reasons from 1985 and 1995 and the percentage of them that went to Australia between 1985 and 1994. Immediately, it can be seen how these two trends share some similarities, but
also
have some great differences, especially in some crucial years. Regarding the number of
Japanese
tourists abroad, it can be seen how there are three different trends in the considered period.
Firstly
, the one going from 1985 to 1990,
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saw a sharp rise from 5 million people going abroad to more than 10
millions
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. After that, there were four years of more or less
steadyness
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steadiness
, concluded in 1993, when
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overseas
travels
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interested 12 million people.
Finally
, in 1994 and 1995 the great increase resumed, with almost 16 million people that took a trip out of the State.
On the other hand
, the percentage of
japanese
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tourists in Australia saw a more variable tendency, that
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could
be divided
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three periods too.
Initially
, there was an upward trend, in which the proportion passed from 2% to 5% of total
Japanese
travellers, from 1985 to 1988. The next year, there was a significant decrease, after which a more steady rise happened, reaching 6% in 1993.
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the end, in 1994 there was another minor decrease. In conclusion, it can be stated that, even if some differences can be noted, the two charts seem related between them.
This
could be explained by the fact that a non-indifferent amount of new tourists decided to visit Australia.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.

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