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Is the radio the best way to get news, OR is TV better for this purpose.Discuss both views and give your opnion.

#radio #news #tv #purpose #opnion
Over the years, the methods used for communicating important information to
the
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people have been evolving with notable differences in all of the types. With the progress in technology, the
use
 of radio and television recently replaced the previous routes of reaching out to citizens on matters that affect their well-being. Despite
this
 recent advancement, a school of thought puts the
use
 of TV as a better option as long as getting
news
 is concerned.
However
, both methods of acquiring societal knowledge have their own advantages and disadvantages which
this
 essay will be addressing alongside my opinion on
this
 matter. The
use
 of
TV
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a TV
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 in accessing
news
 has
a
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 benefit of providing both visual and audio aspects of the
news
. Our minds understand and
interprete
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interpret
 ideas faster when there is
contribution
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a contribution
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 from our abilities to see and hear. An example can be seen among the elderly who may be able to pick up information by using their visual abilities even though they may have difficulties with their auditory perception of sounds.
In addition
, a larger number of individuals can have access to the
news
as a result
 of the large surface area for viewing the Television provides
unlike
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 the stereo system where the sound may only get to a few people.
This
 can be seen among families who watch TV together.
On the other hand
, one of the major
benefit
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 that the
use
 of radio has is that it is affordable and accessible to all. Radios can
been
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 operated on electricity and batteries which
make
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 them a good choice for areas where there is no electricity. I think both methods can be employed in getting information in order to take
of
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 the drawbacks of each method.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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