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Some people think that travel is necessary to learn about other nations. Others however think TV and internet are best way to learn about other countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #travel #nations #tv #internet #countries
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Some people think that
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travel is not
a
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very important to meet other cultures,
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however
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 I do not agree that TV and
internet
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the internet
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 can give the same
impresion
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impression
 as an actual visit to some places. Nowadays, one can get plenty of information online from
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different websites and social media, so it is very easy to find out anything
such
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 as
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interesting facts about other countries, traditions and nations
for instance
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. Some people consider that reading about places and learning history, geography and other things
is
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 enough to get
know
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to know
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 the country, so there is no need to waste money and time on
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travel.
On the other hand
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, reading can not replace
experience
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 that a person gets
while
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traveling
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travelling
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. Online research can not substitute
smell
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the smell
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 and taste of traditional food and drink,
feeling
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the feeling
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 of the sun and waves on the skin or demonstrate
impression
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the impression
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 that we get
while
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 talking with the locals.
In addition
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,
traveling
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travelling
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 is very useful for everyone to
persue
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pursue
peruse
 personal growth,
gain
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and gain
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 more confidence and independence by
geting
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getting
 out of
comfort
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their comfort
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 zone.
Also
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, communication with native speakers is very good for learning or improving foreign languages. In conclusion,
although
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 it is very easy to access
to
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all information about countries, nations, cultures and traditions online, through different media today, that can not replace things that we can gain
traveling
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travelling
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