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Plastic shopping bags cause pollution on land and in water, and therefore they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

#plastic #bags #pollution #land #water
According to
 some, many
kind
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kinds
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 of
plastic
materials
 or
products
 ought to be reduced because of the most influence on environmental problems. I partially agree
to
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with
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this
 view and there are several reasons and examples. It is believed that
the
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apply
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plastic
materials
 are comfortable and useful for their life . Take saving food or many kinds of cereal
products
 from some insects good example.
Moreover
,
plastic
shoping
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shopping
 bags are cheaper than other packaging alternatives, and
therefore
 they are
choosen
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chosen
 by
costumers
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customers
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, in my opinion.
However
,
although
 some advantages of
plastic
shoping
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shopping
 bags or
materials
 protect food against pests and microbes, I consider these
products
 are very dangerous for environmental problems.
To
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This
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this
 means they can be used only once and
then
 these
plastic
materials
 are thrown
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into dustbin
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dustbin
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dustbins
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 by people.
As a
result
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,result
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this
 process causes
the
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an
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increasing
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of
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in
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 pollution
to
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in
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 my view. The official companies and government should focus on the effect of
plastic
 packages
to
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on
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 reducing fresh water and land.
Furthermore
, I think that they ought to
more
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have more
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 alternative
products
 for shopping or daily using things in our life.
For example
, we can use paper bags for shopping purposes. In conclusion, despite the many good facilities of
plastic
 packages in daily life, I consider these
products
 seriously affect
to
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our environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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