(tanha ) The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

(tanha ) The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the percentage of divorces in
Finland
and
Sweden
over a 5 - year
period
between 2011 and 2015.
Overall
,
Sweden
experienced a downward trend
while
Finland
showed an upward trend
troughout
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throughout
the
period
.Both
countries
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divorce rates
has
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some fluctuations.
Furthurmore
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Furthermore
,
Finland
initially
had a lower rate than
Sweden
at the end
of the
period
.
Sweden
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Sweden's
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divorce rate
was45
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was 45
% in 2011then it rose slightly to 48%in 2012.
However
,the
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showed
gradual
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decrease to 47% in 2013 and
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dropped
droped
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dropped
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steadily
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to the end of the
period
around 45% in 2014 and 37% in 2015 Tanha (IELTS): The percentage of divorce rate in
Finland
was 36% in 2011 and it decreased in 2012.
However
,it rose to 39% in 2013 and 40% in 2014 and remained
stwady
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steady
in 2015
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Vocabulary: Replace the words finland, sweden, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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