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In today's world more work is done by machines do the benefits over weigh the drawbacks of impact on individuals and society.

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In
this
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 era,
technology
 is proliferating continuously so the majority of individuals
prefers
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 to use
automated
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 system in their
work
 as compared to labour.In my opinion,the advantages of
this
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 disadvantages.
This
 essay will shed light upon my perspective in upcoming paragraphs
Firstly
,the main benefit of using
machines
 in
work
 is that modern
technology
 has replaced
the
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man power
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manpower
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 with machine power.In
this
 contemporary era,most
of
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the
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industries complete their tasks with the assistance of digitalization as it
work
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more fast
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 rather than human beings.No doubt,it puts
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affect
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effect
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 on employment,but robots save money because people invest their capital once
on
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 robots,
then
 they do
work
 without getting
salary
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.
As a result
,companies may earn extra profit.
Secondly
,automation could
work
 efficiently and accurately.When employees do
work
 in any field,sometimes they do errors as mankind have
feeling
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such
 as
strees
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stress
streets
trees
,over
exictement
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excitement
,
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 and many more.
Consequently
,they may be less efficient in their occupation,
whereas
 the
machines
 might produce more in
little
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a little
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 amount of time and it may reduce
workers
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workers'
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 cost.
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conducted by 'Harward University' revealed that amazon india decreased
their
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 number of
personnel
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 because they brought up robots in the working
enviornment
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environment
.
Nevertheless
, there are drawbacks of robotics
over dependence
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 on
machines
is
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that
machines
 reduce the need
of
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 manual
work
 which
lead
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 to unemployment.If mankind totally
depend
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 on modern
technology
,they may become jobless and
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not
fullfil
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fulfil
 their basic needs
along with
 they can fall into financial crises because
one
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they
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 would not have job opportunities.
To conclude
,
technology
 may simultaneously benefit us and create problems, but from my point of view, its positive points are more considerable than the demerits
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