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Many wild animals have become endangered. Why has this happened? What can governments do to stop this from continuing to happen

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Many species of wild
animal
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 are now endangered. For example, the number of black rhinos has declined from over 65,000 in the 1960s to just 2,500 today. Sea
animals
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 like some types of
whale
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 are
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 at risk. In
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essay
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 I will look at some of the causes of
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 situation. I will
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 move on to consider what
governments
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 can do to deal with
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 problem.
It is clear that
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animals
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 are dying out because of human activity. People have hunted
animals
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 for sport or for their fur, horns or other body parts.
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, they hunted tigers for their bones, which were used for
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. Another reason for species to become extinct is that humans have destroyed their natural habitats. One example of
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 is gorillas in the rainforests, which are now endangered.
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, pollution from industry has created problems for many sea creatures.
Governments
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 can help in several ways. First of
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 they need to make strong laws and give punishments to those who hunt illegally.
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they need education programmes in schools and on television to help everyone understand the problem.
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governments
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 should invest in renewable and clean energy sources
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 as solar and wind power. So, in conclusion, we can say that hunting and damage to the environment are the main threats that
animals
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 face.
Governments
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 should use the law, education and clean energy to improve the situation. Everyone must work together to save endangered
animals
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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