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It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages

#people #risks #lives #risk
It is believed that taking
risks
 for both professional and personal lives is essential for
people
’s growth. There are benefits when making risky decisions
This
 argument offers some benefits,
such
 as ability improvement and
being
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more
confidence
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improvementt
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improvement
improvements
.
However
, these upsides
also
 have some drawbacks as well,
for
instance
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lose
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 both money and
job
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. On the one hand, by taking
risks
,
people
 are able to improve their own
capability
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, whether related to work
and
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 to their privacy. To illustrate, a scientist can gain more knowledge by doing new research that
have
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 never been done before.
Moreover
, some
people
 who like to challenge themselves usually gain more confidence.
Additionally
,
this
 merit is useful for every
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for
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 their lives.
For example
, to win an election, a politician has to trust herself beyond her limit to conduct a campaign to promote herself.
As a result
,
this
 is not only positive for her personal life but for her professional life as well.
On the other hand
, in terms of the downsides of taking
risks
, some
people
 find it harmful
due to
 the effect where they might lose a lot of money and lose jobs too. Some
people
 who usually
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, not only
risks
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 their savings
,
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 but in most
cases
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gambler
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gamblers
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 are often found in huge debt and some of them might lose their job.
Therefore
,
the taking
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the perspective of the taking risk
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risks
 perspective
not
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 always useful for some
people
.
To sum up
,
Although
 some
people
 choose not to take
risks
due to
its
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 downside some others believe that it has important roles in their lives.
Thus
, in
term
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 of quality, I think that those who use
this
 ‘taking
risks
’ in
positive
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term
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 always benefit
by
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this
 idea,
this
 is the reason why the advantages
are outweigh
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 the disadvantages.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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