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Today, many people do not know their neighbors. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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In
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people
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 close to each other very much by helping one another.
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, some
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 believe that they do not have time to communicate with others.
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 from a variety of reasons and some solution will be suggested to address
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 problem. There is no doubt that living in
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large cities will bring manifold community issues. A number of
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 may account for
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 will tend to live alone and
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do not have
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 to meet one another in urban
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. Because they
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 spend time on their work and get
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promotions, so they do not care about
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others. The most familiar example is that in Da Nang city, with
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 life,
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here always ignore and do not want to interact with their surrounding
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neighbors
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.
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, there are still some
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 who make friends and communicate with others around them.
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, it
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 quite that
people
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 not knowing
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neighbors
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 is still a serious problem. It can
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 be argued that there are many solutions that can fix the issues .
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 will bring about profound influences on citizens, they can construct a
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 club in the residential
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exercise with each other and establish a range of new relationships with their
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neighbors
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. A clear example is that, in Viet Nam, residential
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 have improved and built collective clubs to enhance friendships. Especially, thanks to clubs citizens get to know everyone better,
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 will help the to be more active in society.
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 is almost not available in all
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, it
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 no difference that they can connect with
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neighbors
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in
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 social media to contact easily. In conclusion, there
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 a variety of
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 for contributing
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nowadays
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 want to live their private lives. Citizens and local authorities should take proactive measures to tackle
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 problem.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community engagement
  • social isolation
  • neighborhood watch
  • local initiatives
  • virtual interaction
  • privacy concerns
  • resident mobility
  • technological advancements
  • social media influence
  • work-life balance
  • busy personal schedules
  • community events
  • local residents
  • social interaction
  • community ties
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