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The graph shows the
amount
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 of tourists from abroad in three directions in
European
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a European
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country
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countries
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 between 1987 and 2007. It should be mentioned that the quantity of
the
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respondents who gave preference to the coast was
by
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four times higher compared to those people who opted for the lakes in 1987 (40
thousand
 and 10
thousand
 respectively). In 2002 the
amount
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 of polled people who chose to visit the lakes was equal to the number of tourists
preferred
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 the coast in 2007 and
it
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constituted 75
thousand
. At the same time,
popularity
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the popularity
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 of the mountains was increasing from 2002 to 2007 and they
was
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 visited by 30
thousand
of
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visitors in 2002 and 35
thousand
of
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foreigners in 2007. In conclusion, the most striking feature of
this
 graph is
change
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a change
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of
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in
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 popularity
various
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in various
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 directions for tourists. More people
used
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 to
visiting
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 the seaside. It could be connected with combining rest and
healthy
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a healthy
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pastime
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