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Some employee wants to able to contact their employee all the time. Does this development have advantages or disadvantages?

#employee #contact #time #development
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there are some
companies
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, that like to have constant
communication
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 with their
employees
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.using the development of
communication
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 for the purpose of a constant flow of information. In my ,opinion it has benefits, but as well drawbacks. on one hand, having a fast and incredible development of
communication
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. There are some
companies
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 which are using these tools to have direct
communication
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 with their company members at any moment of the day, seven days a week. As consequence, having all the crew hooked all the
time
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,
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, my supervisor is receiving calls from the office including on weekends. even though, during his day off when he is not getting paid for that
time
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 but he has no option and has to answer the phone.
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, on the other ,hand it has benefits.
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 good
communication
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 between the crew which is key when you are encharged of many
employees
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. with the opportunity to inform and update what is happening immediately avoiding wasting
time
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.
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, it helps to run the job safely and have smooth work progress which is really important in all sectors.
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, for any law update or new legislation about ,safety it is important that all the
employees
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 be aware immediately to avoid any injury and cover the
companies
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 legally.
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 many
companies
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 are using
communication
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 tools to keep their
employees
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 connected at all times, some occasions interrupt your free
time
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, but it is for the commonwealth of the company to have all the
employees
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 updated and well-informed at all times.
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