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some people believe tahat professionals,such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the counrty where they did their training.Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #tahat #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #counrty #country
There is many question and beliefs that professionals
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 as doctors and engineers should be required to work
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 their own mainland and other say they were free to go to another nation as they wish. Working on our own mainland is
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 a privilege to see the beautiful things that we never see and experience that we treasure for the next opportunity or job. There are a lot of things to know in our country and we can share
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 with other lineage or society that we encountered
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 as how Filipino Doctor handles
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 rendering of care and management. Engineers in our homeland are important to work here for a better experience that we can apply when going to another sovereign state. ,
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 Doctors and Engineers belong to the foremost professions. These days, three-quarters of our physicians and developer are settling to work in a foreign state because there is more golden opportunities and practically the most paid salaries
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 our own shore.
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 the major reason why many people are going abroad and don't stay in our own kingdom. As we all know Filipinos had extended families and
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 is our tradition to help our family as much as we can and we do our best to support their needs. In my opinion, I want to live in my own territory. I feel happy when I'm with my family and friends sadly working
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 our own fatherland is uncompensated and cannot give full support to our relatives. Most important when it comes to our health some people had own health cards and most of us are not capable to go to a hospital that's why people
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 our coastline decided to stay away for a better future.
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