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Some People Think that Museums and Art Galleries Should Concentrate on the Works of Their Own Countries

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A museum preserves valuables that are related to
history
 and are important
whereas
, an
art
 gallery holds the masterpiece and creativity of the
artists
. Some
people
 are of the opinion that a
country
 should only promote
artists
 and culture of their own by displaying local
work
 and local
history
while
 other encourages the promotion of international
work
.
This
 essay will reflect the positives and negatives of
both
 views.
To begin
 with, displaying the artwork of local
artists
 would be beneficial for
both
 the
country
 and the artist itself. It would make the artist famous among the local crowd and maybe on an international level.
This
 will not only be beneficial for the artist but
also
 for the
country
 itself as it will provide recognition to a
country
 on the global market.
Moreover
, a museum that shows historical pieces of its own
country
 provides ample information regarding
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history
 and boosts patriotism among
people
.
On the other hand
,
according to
 data collected from locals about the installation of cultural
art
 pieces, the most common demand of
people
 was to admit new pieces of international origin. Local
artists
 might suffer in
such
 exhibitions of international
work
 but, it will bring new ideas among young
artists
. Appreciation of
work
 should not be bounded by borders.
For instance
, take the example of the Mona Lisa, the painting and painter originally belonged to France but
both
 are appreciated all around the world.
Likewise
, museums containing remnants of their own cultural heritage rather than artefacts belonging to other nations
,
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 may be able to fascinate some of the audience but, others might want to see something related to world
history
.
This
 would greatly limit the entries in the museum. In my opinion,
both
 kinds of museums and
art
 galleries should be established by the government. One that focuses only on its own
history
 and
people
 and other that contains
art
 and artefacts from different countries.
This
 is the only way to maintain a balance between audiences having different interests.
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