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Some people believe that time spent on electronic games can be valuable for children. Others believe this has negative effects on a child. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 have different views regards to
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 of
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.few masses opine that time given to
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 others think
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 has a detrimental effect on teenagers.
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 agree with the latter viewpoint because playing more videos can make young
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 lazy. It is somewhat true that the
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 of computer
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 can have good effects on the life of
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.
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 have abilities to increase the power of imagination and make
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's having good focusing power.
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 that animated
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 boosts their skills in solving problems which helps them to increase their score in academics.
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 .on a survey it has been noticed that the
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 who play
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 a lot have good capabilities to solve a mental ability question more quickly in comparison to ordinary
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, playing
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 crucial for students. Despite the fact that
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 has various benefits,why some
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 see them as a negative development because these days with the coming of electronic game youngster forget the value of physical sports which leads to obesity and health issues at a very early age.
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,
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 are more important to
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 and they are busy the whole day playing
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 which are not only harmful to the eyes of the
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 but
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 threaten their academic results.since they are unable to give sufficient time to their studies.
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 the set limit on the
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 of electronic is equally important. In conclusion,
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 game has a significant amount of advantages we should fix the amount of
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 for
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 to get the best result.
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