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some schools start teaching a foreign language in primary school year. do advantage of teaching languages to young children outweigh the disadvantages? Give your own opinion.

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It has been argued by many individuals that
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elementary schools
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begin teaching
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 overseas dialect. In my opinion, the advantages of
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 disadvantages.
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, the prominent
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 of learning foreign
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their
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 early age
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 that teenagers might know about different types of
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. when young
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 have knowledge about another tradition, they may easily communicate with another country of people without
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 of guiders with the assistance of
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 their relationship with strangers but
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 exchange their cultures.
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, juveniles might acquire new things if teachers give information regarding other
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languages
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 as they would know the latest things which could be beneficial for their country and
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 society.
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, other
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 may put a burden on
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 minds.
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teenage
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 have more responsibilities related to the academic field
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 they need to give time to outdoor activities so they have no enough time to learn other kinds of language
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before they have more subjects which are tough for them because they have little power to remember that thing.
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, it puts a negative
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 on
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's health.
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, a survey conducted by 'Harward University' revealed that in 2010 a few schools were starting teaching non-native
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 65% of
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 were suffering from mental problems.
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,
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 once schools commence educating another country of the tongue with
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children
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 may face brainsickness and many more, from my point of view, its positive points are more considerable than the demerits.

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