Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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The number of
people
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who are gaining
weight
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is in an increase in many countries, mainly in the
high income
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countries.
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,
this
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is one of the main issues that nations need to consider.
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essay will discuss two main solutions to
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problem.
The
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Obesity
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obesity
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is a serious issue that can cause damage to
individuals
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health
especially
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to old
people
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. One of the solutions is to improve the advertisement by health ministries to give a clear picture of what
humen
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humans
can lose because of
obesity
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.
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, in Europe they try to show a lot of
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in
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their tv channels or radio stations to elaborate
the
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sickness of
being
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obesity
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and the
benifts
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benefits
of eating healthy food,
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, many
people
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start to get
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from
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it and start to eat
healthy
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and reduce their
weight
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.
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,
private
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the private
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sectors
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sector
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should help the government by making a special discount for the
people
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whos
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who
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having more
weight
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to join a sports club and provide them with
a
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apply
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nutirtion
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nutrition
plans. In an instant, in the USA a number of gyms give the
people
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who
suffers
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from
obesity
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a 50 per cent discount for
1 year
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subsicription
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subscription
along with
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a special couch
who
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that
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trined them 3 times a week and provide them
a
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food plan, and because of that a large number of
people
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loss
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lose
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their
weight
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and they start to live a healthy lifestyle. In conclusion,
Obesity
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is a very serious sickness that many
people
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are suffering from, and that can be the main reason
of
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for
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a lot of society getting sick and many heart problems. All countries should take it
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seriously
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serious
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and recognize
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issue and provide a proper solution, like
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the
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apply
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technology to
advice
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the
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individuals or making
a good offers
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a good offer
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from private companies.
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