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Nowadays many students choose to study abroad at university level. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

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The chart illustrates the percentages of
students
 in four different kinds of secondary
schools
 in 2000, 2005, and 2009. As a general trend, the percentage of children going to community
schools
 showed an increasing
number
 of
students
 attending over the given year
while
 the three other educational institutions’
students
’ percentages kept decreasing. In terms of specialist
schools
, the
number
 of their
students
 had declined slightly, one
percent
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 by one
percent
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. Its figure shows the least dropping compared to the Grammer
schools
 and the Voluntary-controlled
schools
 whose percentage of
students
 had a significant fall over the year at 52%, 38%, and 20% in 2000, 2005, and 2009 respectively. As for the Grammer
schools
, their
number
 of
students
 dropped by 5% in 2005 and
then
 it declined by 7% from that in 2009.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of people choosing to go to Community
schools
 considerably increased over the year given. The
number
 began at 12% in 2000 but it rose to 32% in 2005 and
at the end
, in 2009, it reached 58%.
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