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Band 3.5

Some people belive that children should brought up in cities.Others believes that countryside offers a better environment for children.discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Few masses believe that young should
brought
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be brought
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 up in
urban
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the urban
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 area.
while
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thinks
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think
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 rural area
provide
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provides
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more
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apply
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finer habitat for teenagers.
according to
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 me
children's
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children
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 can experience both to develop
good
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a good
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 understanding. To commence with why some masses find cities as a good place for
youngs
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young
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 development because of the amenities provided in
urban
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the urban
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region
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regions
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such
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 as food
as well as
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 better education.
besides
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this
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 rural areas
have
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lack
of
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employment
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due
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 to
this
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 many villagers move to big cities in order to find employment for them.
moreover
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 villages have insufficiency in terms of health facilities and
thus
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 many people
recieve
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receive
 improper treatment of most disease.
for example
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 on a
suryev
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survey
 conducted by health
ministery
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ministry
minister
 of
india
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India
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 it was observed that
mostly
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 people die in villages because they do not get proper treatment on time. Despite the
fact
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 countryside has
significant
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a significant
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problem
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problems
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 but great
opportunities
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opportunity
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 for
childrean
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children
 for learning some vital
skill
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skills
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 which might
helps
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help
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 them to be more
sucessful
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successful
 in their upcoming future
such
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 as the simple life of
village
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the village
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teach
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teaching
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 us how to live
happy
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happily
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 with
limited
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a limited
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 number of resources.
furthermore
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 rural area provides a huge knowledge about culture and which helps to connect more and more with the village.The village
also
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exhibit
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exhibits
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 what amount of hard work is
require
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required
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 to run a family with a tiny budget. In conclusion,
according to
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 we have to try to give exposure
of
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to
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 both city
as well as
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 countryside to learn
crucial
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the crucial
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skill
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skills
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 to face difficult
challanges
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challenges
 in life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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