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The graph show the average annual expenditure on cell phone and residential phone services

The graph show the average annual expenditure on cell phone and residential phone services
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The line graph compares
average
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the average
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 yearly spending by Americans on mobile and landline
phone
services
 from 2001 to 2010.
It is clear that
 spending on landline phones fell steadily over the 10-year period,
while
 mobile
phone
expenditure
 rose quickly. The year 2006 marks the point at which
expenditure
 on mobile
services
 overtook that for residential
phone
services
. In 2001, US consumers spent an average of nearly $700 on residential
phone
services
, compared to only around $200 on cell
phone
services
. Over the following five years, average yearly spending on landlines dropped by nearly $200.
By contrast
,
expenditure
 on mobiles rose by approximately $300. In the year 2006, the average American paid
out
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the same amount of money on both types of
phone
 service, spending just over $500 on each. By 2010,
expenditure
 on mobile phones had reached around $750,
while
 the figure for spending on residential
services
 had fallen to just over half
this
 amount.
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