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‘The two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.’

‘The two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.’
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The table illustrates information regarding the undergrown
railway
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 systems of six different cities.
In particular
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, the opening date, the
kilometres
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 of the route and the number of
passengers
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 each year can be seen. The most notable feature is the opening date of
London
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, which precedes the second oldest
railway
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,
Paris
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 of almost 40 years. More precisely,
London
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 underground opened in 1863,
while
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Paris
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 in 1900. After them, there is Tokyo, which opened in 1927, and after that in thirty years from 1976 to 2001 Washington, Kyoto and Los Angeles developed their own underground.
Furthermore
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,
London
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 has the longest
railway
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 system, with 394
kilometres
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, followed again by
Paris
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, with 199 and Tokyo with 155.
On the other hand
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, Los Angeles and Kyoto are the only cities with under 100
kilometres
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 of
railway
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, which is respectively 11 km and 28 km.
Conversely
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, regarding the number of
passengers
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, Tokyo’s underground is by far the most used, with 1,9 billion
passengers
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 each year, 800 million more than
Paris
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 and more than 1 billion more than
London
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. The other three cities have limited numbers in comparison, with DC underground which serves 144 million
passengers
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 each year, Los Angeles at 50 and Kyoto at 45. In conclusion, it can be said that there are some major differences in all the categories between the three oldest undergrounds and the others, with the exception of
kilometres
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 of route, in which
Paris
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 and Tokyo are more similar to DC than
London
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, kilometres, passengers, london, paris with synonyms.
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