Some people think that parents have a powerful influence in child’s life, while the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part of child’s development. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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parents have
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good control over their
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surroundings.Which is directly connected to their upbringing.I completely agree with
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. First and foremost, infants
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love to mimic other
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and they learn many
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from their
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behaviour.
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child
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his behaviour .Because
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a greater effect on
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many
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to know which can't be
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acquired
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.Without
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coming
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they meet with many
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and it
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them to learn communication.
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,
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are able to gather a
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variety
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knowledge
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society.
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children
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see these and have an idea about right and wrong.
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a good
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person
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wrong way with bad
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influence
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of
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knowledgeable
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is plenty of
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why I believe that
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have a great effect on their upbringing from
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