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Some people thinks that watching news is good for individuals and some thinks not . discuss both views and also give poinion

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Watching the
news
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 is considered an
an
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excellent opportunity, which is assisting
people
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 to know around the world during
daytime
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the daytime
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,
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 because it provides
information
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 from different resources.
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, many authorities believe that
this
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 argument is incorrect. In my
view
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 social media,
such
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 as Twitter and Facebook, is taking place of watching television or streaming services. First of
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 Journalism is changing since
invention
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 of the internet. ,
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 understanding of the
news
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also
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 changed.
Younger
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 generation supports the idea of
social-media
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social media
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 which is providing individual ideas of many
people
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 and their shared
news
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 in most countries at
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any time of the day.
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 Twitter, one of the most important and powerful web-service, give
people
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to
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 opportunity for sharing their own experiences,
news
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 and thoughts.
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, a few television channels create their own Youtube accounts to start streaming on the internet.
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, many
people
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 still use old-fashion magazines, tabloids, broadsheets and TVs for tracking
news
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.
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 social media has
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the advantage
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 of spreading fast, some
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citizens believe that newspapers and television are still the best
information
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 resources because these are reliable and consistent materials. One clear example is a group of
people
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 who may spread disinformation which is unacceptable for urgent conditions namely a natural disaster, a civil war or an election. In conclusion, there are several methods available for
people
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 who want to know the
news
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. Some citizens support the opinion that old-school
information
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 resources TVs and newspapers are still the best. In my point of ,view social media is a great opportunity for fresh and true
information
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 compared to TV which is going to be obsolete.

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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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