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The internet has made many things in our lives simpler. However, it has also brought new threads. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages ?

#internet #lives #threads
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After the
internet
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 was discovered in
1960s
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,
this
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 kind of
tehcnology
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technology
 has made easier many aspects
in
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 our civilization.
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, I admit that it has
detrimental
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effect
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effects
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.
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, in the following paragraphs,
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merit
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the merit
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 and demerit of
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internet
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the internet
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, and explain why the positive side outweighs the negative impact.
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internet
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the internet
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 has altered our lifestyle, specifically
communication
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the communication
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 field. Before the
internet
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 was created, we might exert some
medias
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media
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 like using telegraphs and sending a letter when we want to
comunicate
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communicate
 with our mates.
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, nowadays, modern societies are able to contact anyone in any place instantly using
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internet
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.
Additionally
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, we can exert free
internet
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 in the public area,
as a result
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, it is free to send messages.
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, when I would
to
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develop my English ability, I asked my friends to assist me. We decided to practise using
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the video
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 call
platform
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platforms
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 via our own computers without making a schedule to meet directly because we did not have adequate time. Turning to the disadvantage,
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internet
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 contains hazardous
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 like hate speech materials, sexual
contents
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content
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, and disturbing images. Those
type
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types
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 of
contents
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content
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 will impact someone's
behavior
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, particularly teenagers and toddlers.
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, it is a mandatory action to guide
continously
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continuously
 the youngsters when they search
any
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for any
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 information using
this
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 kind of innovation.
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, when my sibling asked me to help
his
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internet
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.
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, I always told him about the substance of validating information and avoiding disturbing elements when exerting the
internet
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.
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, I stand on
a
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 position that
merit
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the merit
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from
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 the
internet
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 outweighs
demerit
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the demerit
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do
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due
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 to it
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 us when we want to start a
converstation
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conversation
 with someone instantly.
Although
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,
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 the
internet
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 contains negative materials, as a matter of
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the previous
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 statement, we can
minimaze
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minimize
minimise
 the detrimental effect by guiding children when they should learn from
this
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 kind of innovation.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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