The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams above show the changes in Grange
Park
between 1920 and now.
Overall
, only the rose nursery on the left of the Arnold Avenue entryway is kept the same and there is a new feature was added to the place. As we can see, right after you come into the
park
from the Arnold Avenue entry,
instead
of the old fountain that was built in 1920, we can see that it was replaced by a big rose
garden
, that was properly combined
by
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the old rose
garden
on the right of the Arnold Avenue entrance and the rose
garden
that was on the left of the Eldon street entrance. Surrounding that new rose
garden
are
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the seats that were moved from around the
park
.
Moreover
,
instead
of the rose
garden
on the top right of the
park
, a new cafe was built to meet the demand of the people that visit the
park
. Next to the new cafe, the pond for water plants was turned into a
children
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children's
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playground for families to let their kids meet new friends. Opposite the new cafe and
children
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playground, a new water feature was added to replace the old glass house and a new underground car
park
was
also
built underneath that. On the other side of the diagrams, the old stage for musicians was upgraded into an amphitheatre for concerns with a bigger scale and more seats.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, garden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.

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